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Rrbd Second Draft by NeoEdensKing Rrbd Second Draft by NeoEdensKing
And here's my second version draft of the boys ^^

Brick the Leader controls fire and is the most skilled
Butch the muscle is all power based and is the strongest
Boomer the uh...well Bishie i guess controls sound sonic boom and is the fastest

2nd version may make another one soon but yeah didn't want them to look all Kingdom heartish :P

So tell em what you guys think and remember to read this journal entry and support RRBD ^O^
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lindsay711 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
ur really good at drawing clothes, the detail on those pants :3
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Kihmiitehra Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013
Boomer's hair looks exactly like that old cartoon of the Hobbit.  grosss XPP
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Mizomim Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013   Writer
Really cool, but Boomer's hair could be better in my opinion. (plz don't hate me.)
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Ordelog Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013
Having read your intentions for these characters, I offer the following (and I know it's long, but please read):

  -Brick and Butch have R's on their clothing, while Boomer has a B. This makes sense for them as a team, but is distracting and not cohesive for them as individual characters. Perhaps a "RRB" logo that they each have? Something like that would connect them, allow for more flexibility in where they stand, and let them stand apart as their own character.
  -Brick doesn't look like much of a fire guy. His clothing is long and baggy, and would cause difficulties in fighting. Fire is difficult to control, and long, baggy, extra pieces of clothing can easily catch on fire, particularly for a twelve year old who won't (I would assume) have complete mastery of his talents, even if he is super smart. He also doesn't appear particularly intelligent. He looks intense, but he lacks an obvious quirk or nervous tick that usually accompanies hyperintelligent characters (i.e. L has bags under his eyes, slouches, and has a sweet tooth; Dexter has glasses, lab coat, and later the cybernetic tech; etc). I like the way you draw fire, it's different than I'm used to.
  -Butch doesn't look all that strong. Yes, it's a superpower, so he doesn't necessarily need the literal muscle, but it would make sense for the character. He also doesn't look dumb. Currently, Butch just looks rough, outdoorsy, a little mean, and like he wouldn't care about schoolwork. Butch and Brick have outfits on that would actually work very well if you switched their outfits, leaving Brick with the hat(maybe, I'll address hair later), and leaving Butch with the tattered sleeve ends. Baggy/long clothes can easily be hiding a lot of muscle, and if the character doesn't slouch, such clothing conveys strength.
  -Boomer's outfit is very appropriate for a speed character, and the little rings you show near his hands are an effective way to convey sonic ability without the cliche scream. I also like that the rings appear somewhat rough; that's unusual and much more interesting than a plain circle. Perhaps circles under his feet or behind his back? That would underline his speed aspect. He isn't smiling, though, which he probably would be if he were the kind character you described him as.
  -Ok, Butch's hair looks like fire, Brick's long hair makes him the bishounen, not Boomer, whose afro slightly confounds his speed. I'm not really sure what you want to do with this, but the long straight hair is Bishie, an afro-type hairstyle like Boomer's is typically tough-guy, or "I'm a genius and I'm too busy thinking about other things to care how I look" which doesn't really agree with how the characters are now, but could certainly be made to work, and Butch's hair does look kind of like fire. Boomer's hair does kind of fit with his little sonic rings, now that I think of it, but maybe all the pokey-outie parts(I'm sure there's a word for that) should be in the same direction(rotationally, like the sound rings).
  -You clearly are skilled at drawing, and the characters look very nice. It's impressive that you made this into a line art just for showing a stage in the design process. The characters look like brothers, and they look like a team. Their designs fit with each other while not being too similar, so they aren't likely to be mistaken for each other (even if they were the same color).
  -A hyperintelligent fire character such as Brick is not something that is done a whole lot, and it will make your comic all the more interesting for that distinction.
  -Boomer having the sonic powers be part of his speed is good because it means he doesn't necessarily have to be hyperactive or impulsive. He can slow down and keep pace with others if he needs to while not giving up the high top speed. The sonic powers also give a good reason for short, extreme acceleration.
  -Butch is the dumb muscle... it's all in the character development. Where will you go with him?

With eager anticipation and wishes of greatness,
Ordelog
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013
...Ordelog, would you be interested in being an editor for the Main Script of RRBD?
You most certainly have what it takes as far as qualifications go.
I admire how you pointed out ALOT of things no one has counted on which really will be explained in more detail later.
Also I like how you point out what the boys are missing or how their appearances don't match their personalities to an extent but again the information given was NOT really all that clear as I'm prone to keeping much of what i do have on projects hush hush ^^;
But I WILL be explaining this in more detail to this on those that work on the project so again i ask if you are interested please let me know ^^
 
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Ordelog Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
Sure. I'm in school, so I don't entirely know how my homework load will vary from week to week/day to day, but I don't have much else going on, so I'm sure I could "be an editor for the main script." I totally understand the desire to keep information under wraps. I do that all the time. So yes, I'm definitely interested.

Do I need to friend you or follow you or something? Sorry, I haven't used dA much in the past, so I don't really know how it works.
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Merfnstuff13 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'M SO EXCITED! :D I have a really good thing about your comic ;)
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maleficmeklord Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013
I have a good feeling about your comic.:)
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013
ah thank you ^^
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lessermine Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
I always thaught boomer would have his hair smooth and pointing downward not in an afro.
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SaturnGrl Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Boomer's outfit looks like he paid a visit to Kingdom Hearts, and stole Sora's clothes. O_o
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
...Hold that thought ^^
*grabs chainsaw and walks through portal of darkness toward destiny island*
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SaturnGrl Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Since I myself am not a Sora fan, I am in favor of this action. :D
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
Ya could have fooled me =3=
*tosses chainsaw with strands of brown and red hair in it*
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SaturnGrl Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I was just disturbed to think that Sora was running around nekkid because Boomer stole his clothes.
But you fixed that. :D
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013
...Yeah...that right...it isn't anything like that at all >o>

...>__>

...>__>

*Walks away whistling Oh Danny Boy*
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1Julivia Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Student General Artist
Yes! Finally I get to see them! I would love to draw fan art!
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
Glad you like ^^
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LuckyGuy16 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Well, I wish I would've come across this much sooner because the RRB's are my favorite PPG characters. I'm glad someone is finally undertaking the task of giving them their own story. As a self admitted tard for the boys I would be honored to partake in any endeavor involving them especially the writing portion. I can aid in either the one-shot or main story (wherever you want assistance). I am currently an English Major in college and am in the process of writing my first novel so I know a thing or two about constructing a good story. I have even written a few one shots starring the boys on FanFiction.net. If you want to check it out here is the link: www.fanfiction.net/search.php?…. I hope I can help and even if I can't I can't wait for your project to get underway. If you deign to contact me you can reach me at pjakeris@gmail.com or jakerisp@outlook.com
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
ahhhh interesting ^___^
I'm interested your work seems very sway :)
Also same here one more semester after this one and I'll have my English B.A. :D
Also ANY help is always appreciated =)
And uh next time send your info by NOTE ^^
I have a skype if you do as well Note me your name and the times we can chat and we can go from there :)
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LuckyGuy16 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Actually, I don't have a skype. Silly me. I can still tell you my free times though and we can meet on any of the other social networking sites. I frequent my facebook most often so if you have an account my name is Ja'Keris Porter. Today I will be free between the hours of 3:30 and 9:00 pm.
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013
hmmm well and i know it sounds stupid but I hate face book XD

? do you have a gmail and gtalk?

if so note me and i can email you and chat with you there ^^
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LuckyGuy16 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I do. It's pjakeris@gmail.com
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013
Got it :)

remember to accept me ^O^
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LuckyGuy16 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Got it. I sent you an email already.
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013
got it
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redsteel115 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
Why does boomer have mini destructo dishes ?
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
:D

Not mini distructo discs the image make up was a bit off :P

they're "boom" discs I'll explain them in more details later on :)
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JenniferLee26 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
I think it's going to be epic, no matter what design it becomes. Always be true to you and your tallest.
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
Wow thank you ^^

also you said "tallest"...was that an invader zim ref?
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Izayo-Fireheart Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
As a major Kingdom Hearts fan, I feel the need to tell you that one of my first thoughts on this pictures was "oh, this kinda has some Kingdom Hearts feel to it in the clothing designs", and that was before I read the artist's comments. ^^; Mostly, it's Boomer that looks like he's got a KH edge to his look, which quite honestly is probably the shoes and how the shorts and jacket are. Butch doesn't have as much of a KH feel about his design except maybe in the hair (which kinda looks like Hayner's, or maybe even young Axel) but other than that I'd say it's only the shorts really that look Kingdom Hearts-y again. Brick, like Butch, isn't very KH like in comparison to Boomer. The pants just look somewhat like Riku's from KH I, which might even change with coloring.

I've typed more than I meant to now, so I hope this is useful to you in any way and not just a nuisance, so sorry if it is. ^^;
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
XXXDDDDD lol
Thanks for the critique :)
Still ^O^
I SWEAR to GOD I'm gonna Kill Sora *O*
KH is my favroite Game till DDUP But Seriously i'm amazed how people never heard of Elsword or BlazeBLue or safebooru hash tag fire XD
This is no rage at you ^^
But that brunettes had this coming for about 6-8 years @___@
How dare KH transfer over to Nintendo AND a system that hasn't even come out yet and leave the PS3 Series hanging high and dry >O<
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Izayo-Fireheart Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
xD
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kr1ms0n37 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013
I like brick's design although as a bad boy I imagined he turn his cap around
butch's look good in this, savage and feral
the only problem I have is boomer's hair...curly hair look weird on him
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
XD
Well again i wanna give the boy's a different vibe and purpose from the "originals"
But i can see why they all seem a bit off >=}
Still if ya really wanna change the hairstyle idea I have submitted a hair chart you can vote on some new do's :)
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kr1ms0n37 Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
cool will do ! :)
also is their outfit going to stay like that for the finish product ?
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NeoEdensKing Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
Well holding a contest to determine that ^^
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